Show don't tell

tell: Jack black was shocked
 his heart raced a million miles & his face was as pale as a penguin stomach.jack black was shocked as he walked into his room and his fries where gone and his eyes watered like a water fall.

tell: ad revenue please was excited to see his dad
jumping up and down like a crazy kangaroo running as fast as a Lamborghi and hugging as tight as a bear.

tell: Kody was sad.
tears ran down Kody's eyes as his lips quivered because his dad went to war and didn't come back.